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PostSubject: the Only Well   Wed Oct 07, 2009 5:23 am

Oddly hale is the haunting tune
Wind whispering across the deserted sands
Coyote begging the old man in the sky
Stars watching with a curious wonder from behind the moon
Beetles skittering a rough rhythm around the rocks
Song swirling around the fading footprints of the hopeful man
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PostSubject: Me likey   Thu Oct 08, 2009 4:33 pm

Sounds like someone got lost in the desert. What I like about it is this: because there is no rhyming, and varying syllables in each line, it makes me read each line as an individual statement... When read all together, it comes across with a sense of urgency. This ties in with the content itself, as the hopeful man is likely feeling a sense of urgency as well. At least that's what I got out of it..
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